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Lift up trembling hearts
to the booming voice
in the supernatural skies.
Flee! Flee with blackened faces.
Heaven hovers the glass walls,
before lies a thousand painted skulls.
Remember the crying mother:
the cross-shaped scar
Scratch the glass wall, defile it!
Paint naked women.
Eat and drink till mouths choke.
TV models: drool, sit, and stare glued.
"GET OUT! GET OUT!" While nailing up boards.
Upon the land, he could reign fire,
but tears fall instead.
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I wrote this for my next poetry assignment. (I'm not getting graded on content, just if I posted something or not.) I was supposed to represent a whole with a part (it's a poetry technique...)
I guess this came out of the constant Christian/Jesus bashing I keep hearing in my global lit class. They keep equating Catholicism with Christianity and religion with relationship... I'm very sad... both very different things. But I'm a really bad Christian and don't say anything either... T_T I have no courage to speak in class.

I know poems are left for interpretation, but I feel I should explain the lines. SO SKIP IF YOU DON'T WANT TO READ!

Line 01: I think for Christians, trembling hearts is pretty self-explanatory.
Line 02: booming voice can be none other than God himself!
Line 03: supernatural skies... heaven!
Line 04: Blackened faces, I felt represents all the evil we have in our hears and how it shows up in what we do in everyday life, so wearing our evil like makeup? If that makes sense..
Line 05: the glass wall is like the physical representation of the separation of God from man. We can "see" so to speak, each other, but we cannot touch. Actually, now that I think about it's, it's the opposite. We touch but don't see. T_T But I need the glass wall for the reset of the poem...
Line 06: thousand painted skulls: all of humanity. We're all technically dead anyway... and painted again reflects the wicked makeup we all wear, but this time, to hide our deadness.
Line 07: crying mother is Jesus's Mother, Mary. And all the other Jews when Christ was crucified
Line 08: cross-shaped scar reflects all the suffering that Christ went through, the cross at the pinnacle of suffering. I wanted to add something about sacrifice in there, but I couldn't think of anything...
Line 09: scratching: our desperate attempt to mark up the separation between man and God, to make humanity grow further apart from God...also reflects 2 of the 7 deadly sins: pride and wrath
Line 10: reflects lust and greed
Line 11: reflects gluttony and greed
Line 12: reflects sloth and greed
Line 13: Like line 9... we're also telling God constantly to get out of our lives in so many different ways, like kicking him out of schools, some people wanting to remove "In God We Trust." (Just a thought, but how many people in the USA actually TRUST in God?)
Line 14: Reigning fire, to Christians, this is also self-explanatory
Line 15: tears: God's ultimate pain, suffering, and sadness. He is so sad that his children want to be separate from him... I couldn't depict this any other way...

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I wrote something in my Global lit class that spurred this whole poem. It's not very good prose at all. It's quite horrid, but I tried...

We set up God to first be distant from us, that we cannot know him; that we cannot have an intimate relationship with the Almighty Creator. But then we set up a wall - a glass wall. We recognize that He is there, that He exists, and that He is a great being. Yet that wall, we wish to separate ourselves from him in more physical terms because people will only believe physical evidence. That glass wall makes Him something we cannot touch, we cannot hear, and possibly cannot even see. We begin to believe that God is then illusory, a figment of the imagination and those fascinated by the Lord God are only leaning on the hallucination on as a crutch. But then I ask, isn't anything we worship a crutch? It may be drink. It may be sex. It may be video games. It may be school. It may be our job. The physical world - they are "nonconformist," "wrong" or simply "insane." People say, "rebel." Join the ultimate rebellion by becoming a Christian. We're persecuted loads more than any other type of person in the world and over time. Well, rebellion isn't about being persecuted, or is it? But that's not the reason I follow God. But even then, that glass wall... God sill exists so we take paint and splash, rub, and flay anything across it. If we do not see the hallucination in that transparent surface, then He will not exist. A common mistake people make. Another is that people believe God is completely dependent on people. What arrogance! No. He could destroy that glass wall. He could destroy us all. But we told him to get out of our lives. We, not him, put up that glass wall. We are the ones who threw paint at it. We are the ones who defile it. He simply nodded, and like the parent He is, said, "When you need me, come to me, and I will be there for you." He is not a conditional lover. His words and promises never change. We cannot blame God for the things we have done to ourselves.
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~Brisingr-Arget Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was rather nice. No masterpiece, but it was nice to read, and I liked your interpretation.

Well done.
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~k-h-o Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for some warm compliments on such an old piece.
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~Lhmac Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not so into poetry, so I can't feel this very well, but your comment? I get that so much.
I did a creative writing degree, and the dismissal of God was so obvious, the very air was full of it. Sometimes I think some of the most hardcore atheists come out of literary types. Certainly the most full-on ones I've ever met have been artists. It may come from the idea that we think we know everything.
Anyway, I got distracted from my point, which was about people equating Christianity only with the bad things they see in Catholocism and refusing to separate religion from their idea of Christianity in general. I always feel that so many more people would see the truth if they stopped assuming stuff about Christianity and actually found out what we're really about...
I don't think that was my point, either. But hey, kindred spirits. I'll pray for you to have boldness in sticking up in the gospel.
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~k-h-o Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Neither am I anymore... I wrote this, 2, 3 years ago? I'm more of a novelist. I'm no longer in college, so I don't have to deal with their self-absorption anymore. I don't think it's just that artists tend to think they know everything, but also they think anything can be interpreted anyway they wish as long as they have a few lines of "evidence."

But I totally agree with your sentiments and I'm finally glad to meet someone who feels the same way I do. I find that there are those who will force onto others their perceptions of what believing in Christ is when they've never researched or tried to experience him.

Thank you so much for your caring and your comments! I'll pray for you too for boldness or anything else you need. =D
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As an atheist myself i find it hard to enter these situations without gaining a form Dissmisal or an idea of my instant objection to all things religion. But in actuallity I do see a certain Distaste,dismissal of religous nutrality or even good and even with all the problems I have with your god I sympithize with the bigotry you must feel from these professers. Like a man in a woman's studies course you might say. What ever an my sympothy means to you is yours and your alone.


Peace.
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~k-h-o Feb 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your wonderful response. Because I'm an English major, my peers are typically athiest and I see the dismissal that you're talking about daily, so it's really hard to talk to someone who has already made up their mind, but I think, and I thank you for transcending that by offering your sympathy.

Peace be with you as well.
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"We cannot blame God for the things we have done to ourselves."

So true. So real.
Awesome, awesome job. You say it's horrid, but I disagree. I like it a lot. It's honest and truthful.
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~k-h-o Feb 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. I suggest see a lot of grammar errors and things I could add onto it... my english side is going, "Ahk! Must fix!" Not the content, but the structure, I suppose is a little shakey. This is what global lit is doing to me. I have a feeling more poems will come from this class...
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